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csi_forever1

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Re: The Invisible
« Reply #75 on: November 12, 2008, 04:02:46 PM »
Hey everyone! No this isn't a chapter, but please don't hate me!
I'm going to take a break to space the chapters out a bit longer, but tomorrow, I'll be posting again. I'm just going to catch up on some of my own reading! :)

If anyone has ever read the Twilight series... it is just WOW! I finished the 1st book in less than two days & my sister just got the 2nd one today, I've already read the 1st 100 pages in an hour & I hope to finish it by Friday. Only 400 pages to go! :D

LOVE LOVE LOOOOVE,
Shannon

RusCSI

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Re: The Invisible
« Reply #76 on: November 13, 2008, 03:48:12 AM »
Okay, I know this feeling. It's only tomorrow (for me), about 10 hours before I'll meet tomorrow. See ya and ya story.
H

Billyjorja

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Re: The Invisible
« Reply #77 on: November 13, 2008, 06:40:33 AM »
Keep the updates coming when you can.

I have a lot of my own reading to do as well, but ff keeps me from it.  By the way never heard of the Twilight series, what are they about and who is the author.

Trish

sam11108

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Re: The Invisible
« Reply #78 on: November 13, 2008, 10:04:28 AM »
I haven't read them but I thinks its by Stephanie Meyer.  Its vampire/love story between 2 young adults.  There is a movie coming out this month about the 1st book I think.  They are supposed to be really good.

Billyjorja

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Re: The Invisible
« Reply #79 on: November 14, 2008, 06:11:40 AM »
Thanks for the info.  Just googled her.  They sound just my sort of book.  Love fantasy etc., especially Raymond E Feist and Trudy Canavan.

Can't wait for next update of this story.

Trish


sam11108

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Re: The Invisible
« Reply #80 on: November 14, 2008, 11:34:02 AM »
After this I had to go buy the book so I could read it.  So far so good.

LadyLauraAnn

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Re: The Invisible
« Reply #81 on: November 14, 2008, 09:06:58 PM »
Great update Shannon!  Looking forward to the next chapter!!

csi_forever1

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Re: The Invisible
« Reply #82 on: November 14, 2008, 09:53:53 PM »
Hey everyone; don't worry, another chapter is coming up in like 5...
So I finished the second book on Wednesday... WOWWOWWOOOOW.
Sam11108 - the movie for the 1st book, Twilight, has a movie coming out soon in case you're interested when you finish it. :)

Be right backk with an UPDATE! :D

csi_forever1

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Re: The Invisible
« Reply #83 on: November 14, 2008, 10:03:36 PM »
Here you go my lovely readers :). Please leave a comment, & tell me what you think. :D

Chapter 16:

   Even through the dark of the night, Sara found her way back to her mother's front yard. But instead of stopping and entering the house, she went just one more house down, to Jason's house. Entering the house, Sara felt cautious despite the fact she knew they could not see her nor were they aware of her presence at all. The house was dark, much like the houses surrounding, except for a single light in the kitchen. Slowly approaching, Sara recognized Emma's small frame, sitting in a kitchen chair, legs pulled up to her chest rocking back and forth. Feeling a sense of urgency rush through her, Sara hurried along side the girl, and brushed the hair out of her face to reveal an empty stare. Silent tears were running down her cheeks and stained the front of her blouse. Sara had seen people in this state out of many years as a CSI; a state of  hopelessness, loss, and grief. And to see someone she knew in this state, was very hard to watch. Besides Jason, Emma was the only one who knew exactly what had happened to Sara, and even they didn't know the whole story. Especially the very important fact that Sara was not dead.

   "It's all my fault." Emma whispered. Her voice with no emotion; no sadness, no... nothing. Then, something caught Sara's eye. Emma appeared to be holding something between her hands; a white-ish cloth of some sort. Then suddenly, Sara recognized the pattern, and looking down at her shirt, she saw the same design on both Emma's shred of cloth and Sara's shirt. That's because it was Sara's shirt. Sara then realized that she had just found the first piece of evidence that could help in her investigation. The sound of footsteps descending down the stairs caught Sara's attention and brought Emma out of her trance as she quickly shoved the shred of clothing into her pocket. Wiping her eyes and smoothing out her clothes, Emma put on a weak smile as she walked towards the stairs. Following Emma, Sara watched as she walked up to Jason and instead of anything being said, all Sara heard was the quick snapping sound of a slap in the face.

   "You told me you'd be up in ten minutes. That was an hour ago." He growled at her. Sara then raced to Emma's side and stood hopelessly as she held the side of her face, crouched over, gasping for a breath. Sara wanted nothing more at that moment than to be able to cause some physical harm to Jason, for now actually witnessing this abuse first-hand.

   "I'm so sorry." Emma stammered out, finally catching her balance and some of her composure. "I lost track of time--"

   "I don't need any of your god-damn excuses." He said louder as he raised his hand yet again.

   Emma quickly acted, "What I meant to say was, it won't happen again." she said as she inwardly breathed a breath of relief as he lowered his hand back down along side his body. She then put her hands in her pockets as she held the material of Sara's shirt, out of Jason's sight. "It's my fault." she sadly whispered. For a moment, Sara was unsure of which situation Emma was referring to, but either way, it made no difference.

   Jason's posture seemed to soften as he slowly raised his hand and cupped Emma's face, "I'm sorry." he said, as he rubbed his thumb along side her face, and over the red hand print that was beginning to take shape.

   "It's okay," she said to him, "I deserved it." Jason then smiled at her and kissed her as he then put a forceful arm over her shoulder and led her up the stairs and out of Sara's sight.

   Sara stood there, speechless, now finally seeing the inner-workings of this dysfunctional, abusive relationship. How could Emma believe him? she asked herself. Seeing how easily Emma gave in left Sara flabbergasted. Sara pondered their behavior the entire trip back to Grissom's hotel room.


   When she entered the hotel room, thankfully, Grissom was still asleep. He needs his rest, Sara thought. She then walked over to the bed and slipped under the covers beside him. Curled up close to him she gently traced small circles over his chest. She was caught completely off guard when he lifted his hand and laid it on top of hers, lacing their fingers together in a loving gesture. Sara gasped as she willed herself to be still and calm down. She then said the only thing she could think of to say.

   "Gil?" she squeaked out. Watching his chest slowly move up and down in his sleep, her heart stopped when he slowly breathed out the response she had been hoping for.

   "Sara." he mumbled. Eyes still closed and breathing still even, Sara was almost positive that he was still asleep.



DUN DUN DUUUUN! Comments, thoughts... yeah, they're appreciated I guess. :)

GSRLOVER34

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Re: The Invisible
« Reply #84 on: November 14, 2008, 10:43:21 PM »
great ud! what just happened between those two? this is such an awesome story! i need another ud asap!

RusCSI

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Re: The Invisible
« Reply #85 on: November 15, 2008, 04:54:11 AM »
I like this way! I love this movie, I love this story! Please, update soon, I want to see more!
~H

Billyjorja

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Re: The Invisible
« Reply #86 on: November 15, 2008, 06:31:56 AM »
Great, fantastic, awesome ...........

Can't wait for more

Trish

sixtyplus

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Re: The Invisible
« Reply #87 on: November 16, 2008, 03:01:58 PM »
great update ,got to hurry now with the next one ,he needs to find her quickly  ;D

csi_forever1

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Re: The Invisible
« Reply #88 on: November 16, 2008, 08:18:28 PM »
Hey everyone! OK. Long story short --> I was watching King of the Hill & they made a comment about CSI, which reminded me that I needed to post another chapter! :D
Here you go! Oh, and thank you all so much for the lovely reviews! :D

One more thing! This is the last pre-written chapter I have, and I am now all caught up with this story, so it might take much longer in between chapters now. I'm sorry, but after I post this, I'm going back and writing new a new chapter! Stay with me here! :

Chapter 17:

               "Gil." Sara choked out trying to hold back the tears, "Gil, I'm here." She said, holding on to his hand for dear life. "Please answer..." she trailed off. Grissom's body tensed up and his forehead creased as his hold on Sara's hand tightened.

               "Don't leave;" he whispered sadly, "please, don't go." he pleaded in his sleep. This finally made Sara break. She choked out a small sob as she clutched his hand as if it were the only thing in the world. She couldn't believe he was really talking to her.

               "Gil," she managed to say through her crying, "you need to find me. There's not much time left-" she tried to keep talking but her emotions were all rushing through the floodgates at once, making it impossible to control her crying. The crease in Grissom's forehead softened as he let go of her hand, causing Sara to gasp. But instead of retreating back to his slumber, he wrapped his arms around her and pulled her close to him. Sara couldn't believe it. It was as if she was really there. He was holding her, just like he always would; for a moment Sara did not want it to end as she cried into his chest. But when she watched her tears sink into his shirt and disappear, it reminded her that there really were no tears. If anyone would see the scene that was happening right now, it would look like Grissom was clutching the air, and nothing more; not Sara.

               Sara looked up at his face. Beautifully handsome, as she always would remember. His beard covering up and good section of his face, and his dark hair with the curls that Sara always loved to run her fingers through. Even his lips looked as soft as she remembered. She then raised her head and gently kissed his soft lips. She then laid her head back down and nearly had a heart attack at what happened next.

               Grissom's body then stiffened as his eyes slowly opened, revealing the gorgeous blue orbs that Sara could find herself lost in. He quickly gasped as his eyes grew wide; he took his hand as started rubbing his eyes. Can he see me? Sara asked herself. When he pulled his hand back away from his face it almost looked like he were trying to focus his eyes on what he was seeing. He lifted his hand and flinched when he felt her. He then brushed a strand of hair out of her face and wiped away a stray tear sitting on her cheek.

               "Sara?" he said unsurely in a raspy voice, "is that you?" Grissom's previous gesture was soon shown to be pointless as a new wave of tears burned their way down Sara's cheeks. Surely this could not be happening.

               "Oh, Gil..." she cried softly. Grissom then shot up in the bed now sitting in an upright position and stared at her, as if he were looking at a ghost. "Gil?" she asked. She then sat up and met his gaze and put her hand on the side of his cheek. Grissom then got out of bed and walked into the bathroom, Sara followed him and watched as he turned on the faucet and splashed water into his face. He looked at his face in the mirror, "Snap out of it Gil," he quietly chastised himself, "you're seeing things now."

               "No..." Sara whispered softly. "You saw me!" she told him. He then turned off the bathroom light and began the short walk back to the bed. "Gil. You saw me! I know it!" she said through the tears that were threatening to take over again. "You saw me, you held me, you talked to me!" she cried. She watched as he pulled up the covers to the bed and climbed back under it's warmth. "Please listen." she desperately whispered. "Please, please, please..." she repeated, growing hysterical now. Sara then climbed onto the bed again, opposite to Grissom, and tucked her legs under her as she grabbed his hand. "Gil! Damnit! Listen to me! I know you saw me!" she screamed at his once again, sleeping form. She rubbed his hand and kissed it repeatedly as she rocked back and forth on the bed, crying. "Open your eyes, Gil please, I love you." she said to him. When she waited a minute for any sort of response and she received none, she grew frustrated. "Gil! Hear me, please!" she said as her crying grew more frantic. "Just open your fucking eyes!" she screamed as she threw his hand down against the mattress with enough force that any other person would have woken, but not in this case.

               Sara's tears did not subside as she got off of the bed and found her way to a nearby chair. Sitting and pulling her legs up to her chest, she waited for morning to come, as well as her crying to stop.


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GSRLOVER34

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Re: The Invisible
« Reply #89 on: November 16, 2008, 08:56:07 PM »
great chapter! this is a really great story, he needs to hurry up and find her! ud asap!